Fight for Love

Post type : Short story

She was standing helpless near her punctured car on a highway. Two men coming in a car saw her and gave her lift in their car. After some introduction they were enjoying the journey towards city. They had become friends in such a small time. She was feeling attracted to the guy who was driving the car.

She couldn’t stop thinking about him throughout the night. Next day she had made her decision about him. She called him and asked to come for lunch in a nearby restaurant. She started with some casual conversation and then asked him what are his thought about love.

He replied with a smile , ” I am in love and it’s a great feeling.”

This came as a bolt from the blue to her. She asked him about his love but he didn’t tell her.

“I have met you only once and you need to be my close friend to tell you about my love.”

She was pissed off. But  she decided not to give up. She could not let her love go away so easily. She contacted the other guy  who was in the car that  day. She told him , “I  want my love to be in my life and I would get him or steal him at any cost. I just want to know about love of his life.”

His friend also denied to give any information. He said , “He is very happy in his life and please let him live his life. I might have told you but after knowing your intentions , I won’t tell you anything ”

She didn’t know her rival but had to fight alone. Next day onwards,  she started following him but never saw him with his love. She was desperately waiting for Valentine day. She knew that on that day he would definitely meet her or get her some gifts. So she might get a chance to get some information.

The much awaited day had come. As per her plan , she started to follow him from morning. He went to a card gallery and bought a card. She knew, today she had a bright chance. He went to a restaurant carrying a flower bouquet and that card.

She entered the restaurant following him. She saw him giving the card and  hugging his love. She was shocked to see his love was none other than the other person in the car. They both were happy and gay . She now knew her rival but need not fight.

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9 responses to this post.

  1. You forgot or intentionally did not mention that this story is also fiction 😉 (pun intended)

    I did not expect this end, so I was a bit shocked.

    You could have started with the girl already in love with the guy. Falling in love in one meeting made it quite unreal.

    My opinion – Nice attempt but previous ones’ are better.

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    • Posted by makrand13 on May 18, 2009 at 11:16 am

      This time I was not part of story so didn’t bother to put the word ‘fiction’ 🙂

      I will try to correct the mistakes that i did this time

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  2. Posted by abhishek pandey on May 18, 2009 at 2:30 pm

    WoW… this could be the idea of another Karan Johar’s movie 😀

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  3. The dostana effect. It’s good to see you exploring different kinds of love 🙂

    Rather than fanatic love, you could have made the girl have a huge crush/infatuation to make it real-life. anyway, good going!

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  4. didn’t like the ending 😦 Previous stories were awesome.

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  5. Posted by amitabh on May 19, 2009 at 5:06 am

    nice post ……..
    first part of the story was unreal ……
    but the second part was funny and shocking …. 🙂

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  6. Posted by NoName on May 20, 2009 at 7:15 am

    Dude… as always… i liked it…may not be the best u wrote… but still its nice

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  7. Posted by makrand on May 20, 2009 at 8:56 am

    Thnx to all for ur comments. @turbo sry to disappoint u this time.
    one common feedback everyone had was the first part was unreal. I intended to portray it as love at first sight but couldn’t do that convincingly . Next time onwards i would try to script it more tightly.

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  8. Posted by Neelima on May 21, 2009 at 7:28 am

    I saw other comments…. but your story is not unreal …..it may happen. But strange that you can write on such bold topics…..good try

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