What Went Wrong?

Post Type : Short Story

Genre : Fiction

He was in a boring class and as usual busy in teasing at last bench. The  professor  was extending his class even at the end of lecture. All the students were  waiting for lecture to get over and go for lunch. The class was about to end. Suddenly a girl  stood up with bunch of questions. Every one went furious on girl including him. First of all, how one could decode Professor’s words and secondly even  after decoding how one could dare to ask question at the end of his endless lecture.

He noticed it was a new face , pretty childish and innocent. She had joined the institute in spring session. Slowly they  became friends unknowingly.  Gradually their friendship was becoming deeper. They started sharing everything, used to talk in late  nights.

He realized that its time to say before its too late. He proposed her on last day of his semester. Luckily the answer was yes!!! Everything changed after that for them. They lived for one another. From morning till late night they used to be together. He gradually came to know that she was very shy and religious. He liked it very much. After all who would not love a girl who prays for him. Slowly college days came to an end. But she had to stay in college for 6 more months as she joined in spring.

He was worried for her, how she will live without him. It was the last day for the college. They decided to stay together along with all the friends that night. He was very sad as from next day, he wont be able to see her. They were playing cards. She was tired and caught a sleep. She was looking very pretty and innocent. He kissed her softly and she responded with a smile. It was the most romantic moment of his  life, but then he realized that he was getting carried away by emotions. He stopped himself at that moment. He couldn’t sleep for  the whole night and was  just looking at her pretty face. Finally they  parted for their destinations.

He joined his job and they were communicating through cell phones. After 6 months her degree got completed. Then one day she told him that she can’t continue their relationship as her parents will never allow. This broke everything inside him. He didn’t know how will he live without her. He tried to convince her but finally he gave up to see her happy.

He said to her , “Its ok. I will be happy even as ur friend. What matters to me is ur happiness.”  She didn’t call him for a month after that. He was constantly worried about her. How is she? Is she alright? He called her many times. She didn’t reply to his calls.

Finally one day she called and said, “I  hate you . I have never seen cheap person like you. You cheated me that night and ur intention were not right and this is the reason I am leaving you .” This shattered everything inside him. He tried his level best to convince her that what she thought was wrong, but she didn’t believe a word. Their  friends also tried to convince her a lot. All she said is that whatever he did was all  fake.

Even with all her hatred, he did whatever he could  do for her. He just wanted to see her happy. But she did not believe him. He still lives with her hatred. His heart is broken. He still asks a question to himself. “What went wrong?”. Can you answer?


16 responses to this post.

  1. Posted by DC++ on June 9, 2009 at 7:03 am

    Touchin story…..

    There can be three possiblities
    1) Gal’s parents have put some pressure on her, or any other family constraints which she dont want him to know, hence she is avoiding him, but nt hate him, though it seems like that.
    2) She is in love with some other guy and hence she is doing that.
    3) She is a typically indian gal, who is feeling bad about what had happened at that day.

    If the limit is only up to the kiss, then its not a big deal, as the gal also replied through smile, so its not the guy’s complete fault at all.

    “He tried his level best to convince her” it means gal dont want to listen at all. Bitter but truth is that, guy need to move on in his life and start his new life by erasing sad memory, cause in love what matters are understanding, strong trust. There is lack of it from both sides.


  2. Posted by Santosh Multhalli on June 9, 2009 at 7:39 am

    Moral of the story is

    Kaam katam to aadmi katam as simple as it is.


  3. Posted by amitabh on June 9, 2009 at 9:11 am

    interesting …………….
    i will go with DC++’s 1st possibility.


  4. Posted by Ritu on June 9, 2009 at 10:14 am

    she wants the guy to get over her


  5. the girl’s parents were already against the relationship…so after one month saying all that crap to crush his heart…well there can be two intentions…good intention may be that she wants him to get over her and move on. Bad intention is that she doesn’t want to live with the guilt that she might have something to do with the break-up – so pin all the blame on him…


  6. Posted by Ravi Kiran on June 9, 2009 at 11:01 am

    Maybe she was disappointed that nothing happened that night 😛


  7. Posted by umesh kewat on June 9, 2009 at 11:16 am

    she was doing time pass after that feel bored so she leave to all showing by replying due to pressure of her family… :p


  8. One of my interpretations:
    She wanted to end the relationship for some XYZ reason and the guy has been pestering her for long now, so the best way do get over it would be to put all the blame on the guy.

    By the way, very nicely written and I personally like open endings. 🙂

    Keep Writing!!


  9. Posted by ArbidThoughts on June 9, 2009 at 10:27 pm

    This girl like all girls is partially crazy. Separation from the boy came as a shock to her and she hardly knows how to act. Deep in here heart she is infatuated by this boy (although she does not knows if it is love) but she chickens out going against the wishes of her father. She talks to her friend who is another crazy girl like her and who recommends her to break up.

    She calls up this boy, but again freezes when the line connects, and at the spur of the moment tells the boy that he is cheap and that she hates him, (well cheap is a common dictionary word, and nothing extraordinary about it) ending her relationship in the same impulse the way it had begun.

    If the guy is lucky/unlucky she may again call the next day and tell him “rm -rf last_conversation”, or their puppy love may end up in the same arbid manner in which it had all begun.


  10. Posted by KYN on June 10, 2009 at 4:41 am

    She is terminally ill, and wants the guy to STFU and get out of her life to prevent him from complicating it… ala Mandy Moore in “A walk to Remember”


  11. Posted by Prakhar on June 10, 2009 at 5:57 pm

    rofl @ Arbid Thoughts “rm -rf conver roflmao”


  12. Posted by gowridev on June 10, 2009 at 6:59 pm

    April fool 😛
    Its difficult to understand gals.so, don’t try to understand a girl .Just enjoy ur life. 🙂


  13. Posted by pinchu on June 11, 2009 at 6:14 am

    rm “what went wrong”
    anything, which comes in mind . lol rofl 🙂


  14. Posted by makrand on June 12, 2009 at 9:06 am

    thnx to all for comments


  15. Posted by navin singh on July 24, 2009 at 5:01 pm

    still confused!!!!!!!!!!


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